Revised Introduction

In this post I will completely rewrite my introduction from my Project 2 draft.

Antonio Litterio. "Power of Words" May 26 2011. CC. 

Old Intro

When thinking of physical therapy treatments, the first thing that comes to mind is repeated, guided exercises and most likely some individual tasks as well. One treatment that’s a bit less common is called electrical stimulation. This treatment uses electric impulses to elicit muscle contraction to reduce pain, swelling, and increase range of motion in patients. Due to his expertise in the field, Gad Alon uses a number of rhetorical strategies to discuss the sucessful use of electrical stimulation in his article, Stimulating Controversy. Gad Alon has a PhD and is a certified physical therapist himself; he and is also is currently employed at the University of Maryland School of Medicine. He claims that electrical stimulation is an effective treatment in physical therapy when used properly and in the right context.

New Intro

Rhetorical strategies are a very crucial factor in the effectiveness of an argument. Without them it's almost certain that a text will have no persuasive effect on it's readers. Articles such as Stimulating Controversy by physical therapist and PhD Gad Alon make use of multiple rhetorical strategies in order to create an effective argument regarding electrical stimulation in physical therapy. Electrical stimulation uses electric impulses to elicit muscle contraction to reduce pain, swelling, and increase range of motion in patients. Making use of his expertise in the field, providing scenarios, and displaying studys on the treatment Alon creates a strong argument on why electrotherapy is successful.

I think the new version of this introduction is more effective because it's much more focused on the actual topic. Before, I discussed electrical therapy too much and neglected the topic of the actual use of rhetorical strategies. In the new intro, I made it very clear that the topic of my essay was to discuss how rhetorical strategies create an effective argument instead of the successful use of electrical therapy.