Reflection on Open Letter Draft

In this post I will discuss the peer drafts I reviewed and the comments I received on my draft.

Bert Kaufmann. "Misty Winter Afternoon" Dec 20 2010. Creative Commons Attribution.

Reflect on Peer Feedback

One thing both of my peer reviewers agreed on was that my thesis was a little unclear. I think in my revision I am going to make a bolder statement on what I am writing about. I liked the advice Morgan provided about contrasting this course with previous courses that I've been in to show just how challenging and different it has been for me. I think I'll add that into my final draft. I enjoyed the specific comments on what I did well such as my transitions to new topics and the organization of my draft. Some of my comments aren't applicable to my draft anymore because I wasn't finished with my draft when both of them started reviewing but I still use the comments as a guide to make sure I'm completing all the necessary criteria. 

What I've learned about my draft

I've learned that the evidence in my draft could be a bit more developed. I do include stories but the only solid evidence I provide are hyperlinks to previous blog posts. I might use quotes from a conversation I've had or specific quotes from my projects. I think I have a good amount of sensory details but I feel as it won't hurt to go through and add a bit more. I could also add more specific adjectives to make my stories more effective and descriptive. I do think I did a good job of keeping my draft structured and keeping my purpose in mind. The only challenges I really faced were trying not to repeat myself and coming up with a structure and tone that I liked.

Revision

• I think I did demonstrate an ability to think about my writing and myself as a writer because I actually formulated an outline with the project guide open in front of me and that showed that I am a planner and sequential composer. 
• I did provide analysis of my experiences, I discussed how they changed me and compared them to my previous experiences. 
• I provided concrete examples of my own writing my hyperlinking blog posts. I think I'm going to provide more for my final draft but the descriptions I have provided already are adequate. 
• I don't think I explained the choices I made enough because I felt as though they were obvious. I think I might add a bit more to this section.
• I did use specific terms and concepts. Things like rhetorical situation, audience, purpose, etc. 

Also, I peer reviewed Kelly's and Kyle's open letter drafts.

Draft of Open Letter

In this post I will discuss the draft I've composed for my open letter.

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The draft of my open letter can be found HERE.

I am still unsure of how I want my letter to be structured. This is a pretty rough draft, but I still put a lot of thought into it. When revising my draft, please pay attention to the tone as I really am struggling to find the balance between casual and formal. Also, please give me your full feedback on whether or not you think I followed the project guide correctly and answered the initial questions. Thank you!!

I peer reviewed Kyle's draft and Kelly's draft.