Paragraph Analysis 2

In this post I will discuss the paragraph analysis I performed for my Project 2 draft.

Unknown. "Scientific Review" Aug 22 2005. Public Domain.

HERE is the copy of my draft.

By going through my paragraphs again, the biggest thing I noticed was that I should talk more about the strategy specifically rather than electrical therapy. I do this in most of my paragraphs already but I think I need to make it more clear that the strategy itself is what's being focused on. Other than that I think I include the major genres of the essay with proper evidence and analysis.